Saturday, January 2, 2010

160 – Swamp Lesson

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Spanish moss dangles

From history’s arms

Hidden alligators

With weary wisdom laden eyes

Resurrection ferns

Bring the promise of change

While this world stays the same

 

I tried the 160 character challenge.  For more info go see Monkey Man.

30 comments:

Smart Mouth Broad said...

Beautiful, Beth. You have the gift. And it's rare indeed. I can't do it. A limerick or two maybe but poetry stops me in my tracks.

only a movie said...

This is lovely, Beth. I had a thought to jump in on this one some week... really nicely done w/ the photo too.

otin said...

Very good, but does the 160 include the spacing? I don't think it does?

Beautiful words!

Masala Chica said...

Love it. You have a way with words, beth. (even when its just a few)

Kiran

lisa said...

Nice verse. Very serene.

Kristina P. said...

Love this! You definitely have a way with words.

Bernie said...

I just had to come over from Brian's blog to read yours and it is wonderful.....how do you all do this, what a gift.....:-) Hugs

My name is PJ. said...

And I thought simple haiku was hard!!! This is really an excellent piece! You painted a picture; take a bow!

Brian Miller said...

beth, lovely. it brought me back to time in florida with the moss and the gators...hoping th world finds some shange in her pocket this year...


otin, it does include spaces between words...

Amy said...

Congrats on reaching your challenge.

Deb said...

this is beautiful! you have such a creative soul.

Maureen@IslandRoar said...

You did this as an exercise?? Very nice!
I just saw Disney's Frog Princess yesterday, and they have bayou scenes in the swamps? Your words made me think of that.

Dianne said...

Nice job on the 160, it helps if the computer tools function is on character count setting, include spaces, I tried it away from home and it drove me crazy without the computer.

ArtSnark said...

well said

Monkey Man said...

Thanks for taking the 160 challenge. Nicely done. My son is Mr. Happy and my dog is Mr. Poopy as well. Have a great week.

Kulio said...

"history's arms" I love that! When I see those big old trees drooping with moss I have the same feeling - like they're out of some bygone era. Nice!

Melanie said...

beautiful picture and words!

Matty said...

Well done, and so eloquently written.

lakeviewer said...

Very evocative, Beth. Takes me back to the times we lived in Florida, drove across to teach in Thomasville, oak trees and dead moss on both sides of the road. Those mossy drapes are spectacular.

Enchanted Oak said...

Hello, Beth. I popped in from Monkey Man's blog to read your 160 and I loved it!!! Come visit mine if you like. You did a wonderful job, and it's your first, too!

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

I loved this Beth. It reminds me of staying at my sister's in Florida.

Mrsbear said...

Beautifully written. 160 characters is quite a challenge. You did a great job.

TechnoBabe said...

I can visualize the moss dancing from the huge trees while the alligators see all. The promise of change is not assured change, so for me a promise is elusive. See, I take things way too literally. That's probably why I have problems writing fiction. I was surprised to see you join the writing challenge and pleasantly surprised with your finished product.

Fragrant Liar said...

Wow, that's like putting together a jigsaw puzzle (which I just did and it took me an entire week). Well done!

I miss Spanish moss from my days in Florida. (sigh)

Bee and Rose said...

Absolutely fabulous 160! I could really feel the vibe! It's really beautiful, Beth!

Have a joyous, magical New Year!

blueviolet said...

I truly loved this, Beth!!!

The Things We Carried said...

BRAVO!! Loved it.

Thanks for your words to me at my blog! Truly.

Deb said...

Happy New Year ! I took a break from blogging so I could get my life in order (HA) and since that doesn't appear to be happening I have given in to my blogging addiction. Glad you are still here - love your outlook on life ! Take care !

Jan said...

Lovely picture and lovely verse, Beth!

I can't say ANYTHING in 160 characters, much less anything meaningful.

Michel said...

Wow...very nice. I also can't say much of anything in 160 characters...I use that many in punctuation. I likes my question marks....